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Dmanga_lover

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Aspiring author and manga artist.

2020-04-17 Joined United States

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I do revise it. It's just that some mistakes will slip by no matter how many times you edit it.

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The MC is way too realistic 馃ぃ

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this guy is a giga incel despite being so young

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never ask "what could go wrong?"

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well, that was fast....

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what about family? You know, the people you're supposed to love unconditionally?

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Ok, this was fun, but the writing leaves a lot to be desired. A lot of details are missing which makes it impossible to immerse in the story. The plot is obviously a SAO parody, which is fine, put the potential is lost because of the writing. I recommend you read more professionally edited works instead of the webnovels with horrible grammar and sentence structure. You'll also need to work on your English a little more.

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Where did this come from?

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